The Editor suggests

Auckland Star, Volume LXVII, Issue 151, 27 June 1936, Page 3 (Supplement)

The Editor suggests

Mary Davidson—Your description of the spirit of war Is rather strong- Tor New Zealand. Troops, casualty Jists and war news kept the people or this country ever mindl'ul or the turmoil, but there was. no thunder ol' guns, and the "grim spectre or death" did not keep vigil here. There is too much extravagant description in your story—too many amusing: similes. The theory or reincarnation is a difficult one i'or a young writer to handle; nevertheless you have made a good attempt. Climax ipiite good. Margot Frain—You are a very practical little person to think or "roast beef and apple pie." Quite, a good story tor n little girl, but not good enough Tor publication. Theo Mountfort—lie careTul about details, Theo. Have you ever seen native violets growing beneath a rimu tree? Your fairies are more of an English than a .Maori type. "Pnieiua and Rotorangitira" could have been expanded to advantage. It will be published in time. Allan Carpenter—Your dialogue was quite witty, but rather missed the, point at times. Ho not try to pack too much into a small space. "I Listen" will be published in the liudget. Shirlee McFarlane—The names you have chosen for the characters in your story are too clumsy. D-alnty creatures tike fairies should have more musical names than iilngle Bangle. "Dowdrop" has been classed C grade..

Gwen Richardson—The first episode in your story, "A Tear, a Laugh, a Sigh," is the best. The third is lacking in true emotion; it is too casual. The story is good on the whole, and will be published. The critique Tor your other story will appear later. Thelma Todd—Your little essay on "Autumn" is like the answer to a geography question. It is 100 ordinary in expression to warrant publication. Florence IVIcK. Smart —You should not style a purely fictional character as the greatest artist or all times. The description is too disconnected. It is not up to your usual standard, and will not be published. Eleanor Lindesay—Tile plot of "Los"! Timothy" was good, but your mode or telling it was too monotonous. Try to vary your sentences more, and your work should improve greatly. Jean Jones—A iluent little story, but school stories arc too monotonous. "A Misadventure" is not sufficiently interesting for publication.

Stories that have been judged C grade have l)oen received l'rom Margaret Mackenzie, New Plymouth; Yvonne Wright, Milford; Lesiy Collett, Ponsonby; Travis Wilson, Mount Eden. These people must work hard to improve. They must be especially careful to avoid the*use or too many adjectives.