OUB OWNVEESE-MAKEES.

Evening Post, Volume CXIII, Issue 141, 18 June 1927, Page 14

OUB OWNVEESE-MAKEES.

JACK FROST. Jack Frost, the young scamp, While an elf holds a lamp, Paints pictures bright On my window .'at-night. He paints the gates of Fairyland. Inside dance fairies, liand in hand; There is the Queen's castle of gold Guarded by knights so bold. When the sun comes at break of day, Then my pictures fade away, For Jack's paintings only stay When sun has gone away. Joyce Diiuiison Brooklyn. (aged 11). (Joyce, it nearly wasn't good enough to go.in . . . it was the first veree that saved it. I like that. It's short and crisp and "nice to say," though I expect the "lamp" only happened as a rhyme to "scamp," did it? All the same, it's a picture. The lines in the second verse are longer ... Did you mean them to bet- .. ■ . . with an odd sort of line at the end. Say that verse, beating the time, and listen. Then the last verse does not say very much at all, does it? It seems just rhymes to me. And the last two lines say what the first two lines do, only that it's "put" differently. Joyce, more please. And remember that length" in verse, in anything, is nearly always horrid. At least it has to be awfully good to be otherwise.—Fairiel.) fliin!fliinjmnif^nHinninnniitßimiifflniim]UEiiHnmnißiEniimiii»i»[iHniifliiHnnniini»i»(r&