OUR OWN VERSEMAKERS A RAINY DAY.

Evening Post, Volume CV, Issue 5, 7 January 1928, Page 17

OUR OWN VERSEMAKERS A RAINY DAY.

The Ducks are crying "Hooray, Hooray!" I For it is such a rainy day. [I'hey quack so loud and make ;i noise Tust like tiomo rowdy little boys. They are having a happy time, as you see, For in the brimming pond is the place to be! •PEGGY M'NEILL. Wellington. Is it your very first try, Peggy? It really isn't a bad one, though there are a few "bcginneiy" things about it. The most important tiling always is, of course, that tho words make a picture, and these do. Tho next thing is tho rhyme, and you've managed that splendidly. Then there's the length of line. In order to get the "beat" of your second lino to go with your first wo rather have to stress tho word "For" . . . make it more important than it is. See? And, although the fourth line is right enough, I do think it would have sounded more natural if it had been "Just like a lot of rowdy boys." The last line of all is just a teenty bit too long. Perhaps wo could chop out "in" and still make sense. Could we Now write out your verse with all those tiny things put right and say it over again. Do you like it better?—Fairiol.