The Editor suggests

Auckland Star, Volume LXVI, Issue 230, 28 September 1935, Page 2 (Supplement)

The Editor suggests

Harold Gilmore—Or your two little stories "Woodland Fantasia" was the better, Harold, although both showed good promise rrom a boy or 11. Try not to use hackneyed expressions such as "his brow was furrowed."

Patricia Keogh—The conclusion to your little tale, "The Invitation," was quite good, Patricia, hut the story itseir was too vague to he published.

A. Hignett—Your short essay, "The Deserted Cottage," although expressing quite a good idea, was rather disconnected. Do your host to remedy this fault.

Howard. Kvelyn-Moffltt—We may be able to find, a little corner in which to publish "{'he Murchlson Earthquake," Howard, which was quite vividly written, and had the advantage or being a true description.

Doreen Shoebridge—"Cricket— and Its Morals" did not seem to he up to your usual standard, Doreen. The style was too still and "encyclopaedic."

Yvonne McEwan—Wateli grammatical errors carefully, Yvonne, "Spring Beautv" was daintily written, but not quite up to publication standard.

~,m n , l * la - heson —"Two Bored Persons" , "r" 1 its way Into print, Monica, as a character study or an original type. The theme or your other tale was not strongenough to publish. b

Thelma Wilkinson—Of course, anyone is allowed to write stories to us, Thelma. and we should like to receive more from you. "Our Litllo Girl" was quite a sweet 'ale, ana I think another or its type might tlnd its way into our columns.

Patricia Owen—Another good story from you, Patricia, although perhaps not quite up to the standard or "Desperation." Howover, keep up this style. It is rresh anil original.

Walter Carpinter—l the argument you put rorth in "The riivals" could be better written In essay Ulan dialogue form. Dliiiogue lias to he very lig't nivl flowing to he interesting In such a tale. The story itseir, however, just missed publication, and we will be glad to hear from .vou again.

Marion Mogq—-'Movement" struck >m original note, Marion. Try not to carry on! the conventionallv poetic note ol golden hair .'lllll rose-red cheeks too fur. however. "Movement" will be published

Noelle. IVlacDonalfi—"Flame" \v;is net up to your usual standard. Noelle. The introduction was completely disconnected from the conclusion. Try in keep a continuity throughout either essay or story.

Nancy Hnrvey—Your latest story, ' In •'< Chinese (iarden," was daintily written. Nancy, and had some quite good descriptive passages, it will be published.